I absolutely LOVE this story! Keep posting!

I wasn't fooled for a second. Only an author with a death wish (or Philip Pullman. I hate that man) would separate a couple that soon. My imp muse did take the time to go box Lukas's ears however. She never had to deal with her parents. And if she had, her dad would have scared anyone off before it got that far.
This was rather obviously a filler chapter. I kind of don't like how they're worrying over Captain Orion. She should . . . . she should . . . . um . . . . I don't know. They should do a special 'together' thing for his birthday. That's what I'd do anyway. And I'd give my guy candy. Candy good.

Very cute. You've got a few typos ["loose" instead of "lose" and the like} but everyone does. Looking forward to more!

My imp muse tried to commit murder in the first ten paragraphs. Fifteen or so paragraphs later she decided to scream "Hey, I'm good at this!" and start smashing Drew's head in. I think I've let her become too violent . . .
YAY! William! I've had experience (okay, my spelling has gone to the abyss. I've been up for twenty hours and my spell check isn't working, so I think I can be excused) with people thinking I'm crazy. Just this month I saw three normal teenagers, and I turned to one of my friends (we were hanging outside because it was a girly store and he's a guy and we didn't trust him by himself) and screamed "YOU STOLE MY PINK BUNNY!" And we laughed for hours at the look on those three kids faces.
Anyway . . . I probably shouldn't have read this when I have already been nausous (I'm not even pretending to spell that right) for the last twenty hours. *sniff* Twoo Wuv *sigh*. Wait, do I see the end draw nigh. NO! Okay. I guess I should sleep now. Before I weird any more people out.

Love the chappie! ^.^

Wow, this chapter. xD But the story is very cute and light hearted so far, please continue soon!

There's a reason my imp muse has always worked for Dateline. To kick the crap out of guys like Drew. I can see her hitting him in the back of the head with a baseball bat. Or anything handy. Go Mairi! She finally realized the Will is good. Now he just has to come to her rescue.

Funny thing is, the sweetest guy I know is named Drew. And he has vowed not to date until he's eighteen because he's scared that he'll treat his girlfriend's the way his older brother does. He's just such a sweetheart :D

Anyway . . . have a nice day! (It is so nice that college is out!)

Excellent story.

That's it. My imp muse is out hiring an assassin. I don't know why, as she could probably beat Zack to death herself, but oh well.
POOR MAIRI! POOR WILLIAM! *sob* Now I must plot out what William and Gigi need to do in my head. Because Mairi is gonna need a lot of help to get out of this rut. And William, William *sob* little Willy is gonna have a hard time with it.
I'll stop being weird now.

YAYZ! Two chapters in one night! How can we ever repay you?
My imp muse left me, cackling evilly, and I heard something about beating Zach up. But it left me to think properly until she got back.
Those were the best chapters ever. I don't know if it was the writing, the subject matter, or the fact that it's after one in the morning :D. And Scott addressed the matter at the end that was making my imp muse laugh the whole time. It was perfect ^.^
I noticed some typos that I was too tired to note down. They weren't too big though. Will and Mairi are just too cute together. And she fell on the stairs. Go Mairi!

I don't know why, but after reading chapter 2 I feel like cackling evilly . . . Anyway, on to the review I was constructing in my mind as I read.
YAY! Mr. Scott. I just might have to gush over that accent again. And he has black hair? EVEN BETTER! And he's evil cackle inducing. You're just trying to make him perfect, aren't you?
Overall, the last half of the chapter may have moved too fast, but I don't care because it made me want to cackle evilly. YAY! Update!

I LOVE YOUR STORY! It displaces human and personality flaws and reactions well. On top of that the story is well put together and thought out. It's a excellent story for all ages and genders with the perfect amount of life like situations but with a hint of fantasy that ties it together beautifully. Don't give up on your dreams and please continue writing. Please, I beg you, update soon!

YAY! You're alive! You're missing the period between the 2 and the 0. I'm sad that you got rid of the airport part. That part was fun. But I do like the way you got rid of useless information, and packed everything necessary in. Captain Orion here is much better than he was last time. I can't remember what bugged me about him last time (read it way too long ago) but you fixed it ^.^

Ohh i really like this. I think it was very well written..You should update very soon...please im dieing to see what happen nexts

could you review my story please
thankies

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