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| Quill of Copper 2008-01-25 ch 1,  | abuseCould be longer, oh and spell check your chapters, b4 submitting them lol, *Gleaming* |
| SilverTwilight 2008-01-22 ch 2, | abuseVery mysterious, and dark, but the flow was upset a bit by some grammatical errors. Such as: switching verbs tenses. It has a good background set up, which makes it seem more real. Good job, and keep writing. I will definitely check back on this one. ~ Dx |
| mzdarkstar 2007-12-02 ch 2, | abuseThat was really interesting. Good work! Star* * * |
| mzdarkstar 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseInteresting beginning, if it was a bit short. LOL! from Star* * * |
| Crying-Without-Tears 2007-12-01 ch 3, | abuseupdate i will keep reading |
| Crying-Without-Tears 2007-12-01 ch 2, | abusewhat the hell? |
| Crying-Without-Tears 2007-12-01 ch 1, | abuseim interested.. |
| Kenna-Kat11 2007-11-23 ch 1, | abuseinteresting...it has potential, but i can't tell that much until the story gets going...i'll give you a few words of advice though, try and make your plot as original as you can (even though its next to impossible these days in fantasy) but this sentence "But now there is one person who will change the coarse of destiny." suggests a plot that has been done thousands of time..however it only suggests at this point so be careful in what directtion you take... ...believe me i know this because my sotry "Dark Light" has the whole destiny thing in it, but i am trying as much as i can to give it its own personality... though i don't know if i am necessarily succeeding at this point...lol...so just be careful and good luck with the rest of you writing! :) ~E~ |
| SilverTwilight 2007-11-23 ch 1, | abuseHow can you torture me so? Don't stop there! I'm very intrigued. The intro is perfect, and your descriptions: very picturesque. As a horror **, I can't wait for the next part. ~ Dx |