That was... slightly odd...

OH that's awesome. I like the alternate much better than the first one... but I think they mean more side by side. The new ending to this about killing the brother was unneccessary, I think. It's obvious she's a psycho, that's just unneeded violence (which I know you enjoy haha but still). It has a much creepier end if the last thing the reader has in their mind is Sadie being told that Katie isn't real and her screaming that she did it. That is such a more haunting image than her killing her brother for no reason.

And just like in the other one, the repetition in this poem is what makes it so awesome. It also adds to the creepy psychopath feel of the poem, that this keeps happening over and over again with the exact same results. Good storything. :P I like this better than the other. :)

-Jesse
Attack of the review marathon! (link in profile)

Hey! *huggle* I hope you're having fun~ when are you coming back, hm? I forgot to check if you told me already. Ugn, ALL my precious weekend has been used up tearing turkeys apart and stirring gooey, gorey sauce and stuffings and picking apart vegetables that I didn't even know existed and baking cakes that have three thousand times too much sugar and- well, suffice to say that I haven't had the chance to sit down and write, let alone read and spam you. ARGH. Where is the world going to? *sigh*
Well, what d'you know? I actually SQUEALED when I saw you'd uploaded a new version... glad to see it went from "Universal" to "PG" *grins wolfishly* and you don't need to be unsure as to whether or not to upload fics like this! I know the "soft" version is nice too, but this one kicks ASS. Especially the end... ah, lovely thing. I know you could've done more of a complete description of that end scene, but the way it is makes it more dramatic, more sudden, more... PERFECT. There's something curiously perfect about these gorey/shocking little one-shots that you do- they're always short, poignant, and I love the way you meander around in the beginning before bringing about the ending like a punch in the stomach. :D Glad you uploaded this little gem, I thought it was odd that you had had this idea in mind and didn't get round to writing it... and I finally found out just how you phrased it. :D I think you've influenced me into writing you a little gorey thing for Christmas... hmhmhm *shoves hands in pockets and whistles away*
Alrighty, I'm-a go to bed so that I can be up early and take a more in-depth look at your works, and maybe update Regenesis ("already!?!?!" Yes, yes, I know, it's... *takes up a very Snape-ish accent* shocking!)for your viewing pleasure when you get back. Lovely little ficlet, it would be so cool if you thought up of more little original things like this to upload here... *nudge nudge*
Much MUCH love!
-lilou
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That was spookier than the first 'Katie Did It'. Sort of creepy. I liked how it was written.

Hey,

You did another one XD

And yes, more dark :P

*sighs blissfully*

So Katie isn't real, huh...

Although, I think in the last bit, it might be an idea to describe the scenery a bit differently, or more... maybe tell us the colour of the sky?

And the words 'in the background' aren't necessary, I don't think. :x...

Good story, thanks for the read :)

-Iris

It's so HOT today... is it hot down there as well? I didn't bother to check the news. It's so stuffy in my house, but I dun wanna go out with all the election stuff... >_>