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| Chanteusse 2008-10-04 ch 1,  | abuseThis is an okay story. I guess it's just that because the title was "Bus Stop", I wish you incorporated the setting in the story more. Like, I dunno, maybe making the scene where they got together take place at the bus stop. In short, I would have preferred if we saw that the bus stop actually came to mean something for the both of them, since, well, it IS the title. It deserves more than just a few moments in the spotlight, don't you think? :) |
| duckliy543 2007-12-21 ch 1, | abusei know i love a story a one shot especally when just after i read that my sholders go up so far they touch the sides of my head. omy thats how much i lloved this one shot. wow. you have a very good. very good. mind there, i normally have to wait for some inspiration. amazing loved it! |
| x3life 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abuselovedd it!! haha. it was so cute =) even with the cliqueness... but i liked how he said that thing in the end.. |
| drxxmcxtchxr 2007-12-17 ch 1, | abuseso cute... *giggles* |
| Lily Llynn 2007-12-17 ch 1, | abuseFunny. Cute. Fluffy. And excellent writing. What more do I need to love this? (: Love to xoxluurve for adding this to our c2. (: *Oh and I never got around to replying to your review reply, but I'm happy to hear you subscribe to our c2! I hope you like it. (: |
| katie valentine 2007-12-13 ch 1, | abuseawhh, this is cute! it kinda made my day too! thank you! :D |
| October Rose 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseAww... that was sweet :) It was nice reading how their relationship eventually evolved into something friendlier. So, this is where you've disappeared off to! You changed accounts :) |
| emotionless-stares 2007-11-26 ch 1, | abuseCute story. |
| soda.pop.fairy 2007-11-24 ch 1, | abuseCUTE! I wish I could write one-shots like you :-) |
| Pink Ponies-cheesy but fun 2007-11-24 ch 1, | abuseIt's a really sweet oneshot, but I agree when you say it's kind of abrupt, but I think a little work might make it even better. |
| TwinkleHeart 2007-11-24 ch 1, | abuseaw!! |
| hopscotch 2007-11-24 ch 1, | abuseI really like it! It was so cute =] Especially loved the whole murderer/rapist bit, it made me laugh. Everyone thinks it, most people don't say it! |
| SparklingStar25 2007-11-24 ch 1, | abusethat was really cute...though could have been longer... |
| Naomi Chick 2007-11-24 ch 1, | abuseThe story was very sweet and cute. |
| Georgiana 2007-11-24 ch 1, | abuseAwh=D I really liked this! It was cute and sweet. I would probably have liked it better if it was longer and more developed, but I guess that just proves how much I enjoyed it, heh? Well, maybe you could let me know if you have something else you think I might like? Toodleoo for now! |