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| Clarelouise 2008-02-25 ch 3,  | abuseaww this is so cute faerie, love it! i can just imagine u sitting at ur window looking out with the 'celestial' dust dancing round u! i love the last verse, so cool and the way u put 'me' on the last line is rele dramatic and effective. well done! |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-24 ch 3, | abuseThe descriptions in this piece are really wonderful.. I love the simile in the second to last stanza a lot.. and the description of your hair was really as awesome as well... One question.. what's an open plan house? And one comment... Moving to the beat of the hear/Of my home.. I didn't like where that line split I felt like the "the heart of my home" should've stayed together.. but maybe that's just me Anyhow it's a really wonderful piece PS If you're bored today check out the review game's review marathon.. there's a link in my profile |
| simpleplan13 2008-01-13 ch 2, | abuseI love the ending... the whole piece is great the the last 6 lines are absolutely amazing |
| Auraya 2008-01-13 ch 2, | abuseooh, this has such a magical quality, beautiful. I've just read it three times and it still has that feeling and each time I notice a different piece of amazing imagery. I can't pick out a favourite bit, it's all so fantastic. x |
| SilverTwilight 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseI always admire the moonlight in my room, and have tried so hard to describe it many times in my writing. You said all I could have wanted to. It was lovely, just lovely. ~ Dx |
| Wolf bathed in Star-light 2007-11-25 ch 1, | abuseNO! NOT MY HUSBAND'S BLINDS! PLEASE! TAKE THE CHILDREN! OR THE CHICKENS! BUT NOT THE BLINDS! NO! so it's lovely my faerie, i especially like the last two lines. very . . . . suave. *giggles as she loves the word suave* x |
| HenneyBuggyBand 2007-11-25 ch 1, | abuseoh i love it! great imagery! awesome language! bravo! |
| Princess-anna57 2007-11-25 ch 1, | abuseCool. I like this poem a lot. Great, great poem. Well done. Write on! ~Anna~ ^_^ |
| Clarelouise 2007-11-25 ch 1, | abusemagical moonlight...sigh... i absolutely love love the last two lines Darkness may help me sleep But Moonlight helps me dream so original and so col!! i had to read this twice to understand it but another great one :) x ps jessi thought of a nickname 4 me: clare-a-belle :D |