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| LiME-GREEN-CAPES 2007-12-01 ch 1,   | adorable! :) |
| sweet vanilla mint 2007-11-30 ch 1, | JUST WHAT I NEEDED. :) Thanks for posting this one. I absolutely love it! :) |
| Lily Llynn 2007-11-26 ch 1, | Short, sweet, and cute. (: Simply lovely with it simplicity. (: I also love the writing (it's good... only mistake was one at the end, "letting their breaths to combine" should probably be minus the to) and the mistake didn't really detract from the writing at all. (: I'm so glad somebody added this to the c2! (: |
| stargazerlost 2007-11-25 ch 1, | That was totally sweet. It may be short, but its just one of those stories that leaves you wondering if they'll get their happy ending. It's a great story, and perfect for the season. |
| Imalefty 2007-11-25 ch 1, | aw this is so cute! :) what fluff! your writing is pretty good - there are a few sentence fragments here and there, but it's nothing too big. (second sentence, for example... it doesn't sound quite right) i like the idea of a smile splashed on her face. great description. in the last sentence, i would take out the "to" and make it just "combine" - it would sound a little less wordy... :) other than that, this is a nice little piece. good job! keep writing! -Lefty ps: check out the review game! w (dot) fictionpress (dot) com/ ft / 5649 / 1867 / 1 / to get reviews! (but without the dots and spaces. :D) |
| HelloLovely 2007-11-25 ch 1, | Awh. That was cute. I am having a horrible night and that was a nice thing to read before I slip into slumber. Thank you for that. Goodnight. |