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| Setsuna529 2008-07-28 ch 1,  | abuseThe final two lines are fantastic, they close the poem nicely. |
| broken plan 2008-07-27 ch 1, | abuseyour poem flowed easily and was a nice read, i thought it was beautiful i really liked the last three lines "and may the world just let us be and when they search, they'll never find exactly where we drew the line" I thought you did a good job with this poem p.s. thanks so much reading and reviewing my poem i really like it when people spend the time to make a review because they're helpful and nice to see so, good job |
| Simply Shelby 2008-07-20 ch 1, | abuseI'm quite fond of the first stanza. I especially enjoyed how "crossing the line" progressed, from innocence to maturity. |
| imaginative thinker 2008-07-19 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting and well-written, with an air of mystery. Though I felt sort of cheated at the end...I wanted to know what "line" they had crossed exactly. I can make guesses, but I'll never be sure. I am the kind of person that would be driven crazy by this. But no matter, nice work! |
| lunacy and literacy 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseThis has great rhythm |
| Chidori Nadare 2007-11-30 ch 1, | abuseIt's beautiful and very emotional in someway. The repetition is very good and not dull. Great job! -C.N |
| .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2007-11-25 ch 1, | abuseI absolutely love the repitition of "where we drew the line" througout the piece. Nice work; I enjoyed it. -stix- |
| Miserable Regrets- Riafn 2007-11-25 ch 1, | abuseGreat poem, I luv all the emotions you potray.. the conflict, emotion, and the rhyming. |
| Wish Bone 2007-11-25 ch 1, | abuseI love the ending! It's a beautiful, unique, amazing poem! Ahahahaahahahaa! Loves it. ~WB |