Where is the next chapter? This is really good!

So sad...

Very deep.

I am a fan and this is just the second chapter.

I captured already!

I like this story. However, you should make the chapters longer

nice update! please continue =)

Oh I like this story = D

Aw

continue...

Nice depth in both of the friends and background for Lillian's father. Their meeting was kind of lame and lackluster, but whatev.- it wasn't bad. Just a thought, but, since Gianna is black, wouldn't she and her mother have a sort of accent? It obviously depends on where they grew up, but there are slangs/accents. When my cousin(half and half) called me a cracker I had no idea what she was talking about.

This is really good. But, it is such a deep, horrible scene. You could have done so much more with it. It seemed like you kind of skimmed over it, doing the basic necesity, but not really pushing yourself. Put yourself in his shoes. What did it smell like? What minute details of the boy did he see when he bent down? How did his face look? His eyes? His hair? I could go on. Make the horror real- give the reader a visual. Shock them. Do all those who really suffered like this justice. Normally I wouldn't put this into a review because all this is above most people's level on FP, but you are there.

Again, with that sharp grasp of reality. You really have that and sub-plots down. No big criticisms, but you might eventually want to tak it up to the next level, meaning, even more depth. Ex. Have the background of her mother's childhood and how she came to such low standards- like abuse, neglect, et cetera: ex2 Have Elliott come from a neutral family with a brother or something in the Klu Klux Klan. These is just some thoughts if you ever wanted to turn this into a novel.

Aw...And I totally agree. Just skin pigment. Shouldn't Gianna have done a little more at the end. She seemed a little overly modest for 'a goddess like her'.

You have a much better grip on reality than most teen writers and have really good scene transitions.

And, I have to point out, isn't that the problem? 'Black people' sitting all together. It drives me crazy at my school because a few black kids hang out with everyone and its no big deal. But others feel differently and form sub groups baised on color, segregating themselves. I wish everyone would just get over it already.