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| Rose Warne 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abuseDang... The imagery is just... Dang. You do a good job of putting feelings into pictures, and pictures into poem. There's an overpowering sense of pain and dehumanization running through the piece, of hiding behind a mask just to be admired. Beautiful images powerful message = Great work! And I liked that sarcastic, "No, it’s no disgrace" near the end! Heh. |
| kloun doll 2007-12-23 ch 1, | abusethat's raw but true too, the metaphors are good. |
| The Suicide Nation 2007-12-14 ch 1, | abuseVery nice...And yes, Us guys can be a little...I can't think of a proper word for it, but we can be like that sometimes, and we can hurt...I have yet to figure out why we do though. Heh, guess it's just in our nature... Great writing none-the-less, and I look forward now to reading more. Thank you, _Vincent, SN |
| Cbear9894 2007-12-01 ch 1, | abuseWhoa. Totally awesome. I love the 'growing dummies, mannequins that move' reference. |
| huntsong 2007-11-26 ch 1, | abuseNice poem. You described how people hide behind their makeup (or whatever mask they're inventing for their selves) very well. |