Well, I guess I should've read this chapter before I reviewed the last chapter and talked about not being afraid to talk about religious beliefs. LOL

This was a great ending. Very uplifting! Definitely full of hope.

I wonder if this story would work as a long one-shot? Actually, with all the short chapters it was like a long poem in a way and very beautiful. It moved so fast and there wasn't a lot of action - just a lot of thoughts. Maybe poetry was what you were going for.

Anyway, great job, I loved it!

I don't think you need the disclaimer. It is perfectly normal for anyone, religious or not, to think and talk about those things when faced with death. Besides, even if she had "converted" to some belief on her deathbed, why do you have to apologize for that or give a disclaimer? She is a character in a story and is allowed to have whatever beliefs she wants, just like Van and Renee had strong beliefs.

This chapter was like a poem. Beautiful.

Lol.

I like your Penname. :L

Cause it has my name in it. :D

*hinthint* Elise.

( Not fey ) ;)

hm...i like that she writes on the back of the note, but i wish she had commented more on what she felt about him coming back. i mean, she's looking to the past which is great, but what about the amazingness that is his return?! i sure would be psyched about THAT.

all the same, these short chapters treat you well. you do a good job of putting enough in them to continue building character and yet not overload the reader. it's a good pace and they flow well.

haha, i love the "fighting" reference. i now want to watch full house again and revel in its greatness (though it's likely that this came from somewhere else and that's just the only place that i know it from).

i like his awkward english, but i'm having a really hard time figuring out claire. is she trying to be optimistic about her fate or is she truly happy? does she have bouts of fear, or has she really come to terms with it? how does she manage to be so nonchalant in front of him? though i guess that's encouraged by the first person narrative from jae's pov, it really seems like he is a bundle of nerves and she is just...whatever. but it seems like it should be reversed? i guess stars can be like that too. it just sits strangely with me that he is so excited about her and so genuine. maybe i am a pessimist.

ooh, so he came to see her? exciting!!

this is a good depiction of grace. i like the uneasiness that you're portraying here -- grace's reluctance to broach the topic of claire's death, and claire's sort of haphazard, joking reference to it. i still wish i had more info on the characters, though, to really get settled in this state of first person narrative. i'm sure that it'll get better as the story goes on.

the first person is very interesting here. i guess i'm having a hard time getting into his thoughts mostly because i don't know very much about him yet. i'm not sure whether he is honest with himself and so i can take all his thoughts at face value or if he is sort of playing with me and i should be taking them with a grain of salt. the first person also makes it seem kind of clipped because the scene is described to be so surreal that you almost want to hear a narrator talk about it from afar.

that said, the clipped nature of the first person also helps create this sense of sudden change...his thoughts are begrudging towards claire at first, as if she is this sort of annoyance that he is obligated to deal with, but then it becomes clear that he is fascinated, if not partly infatuated with her. first person allows you to avoid explaining it, and makes it much more valid as a just-is sentiment, which is great.

hey! i'm back on the review scene!

i love your romance (esp. inter-racial)...my boyfriends russian and i'm chinese, so i definitely feel that sentiment.

the letter is interesting and i'm excited to see where this is leading. i am also going to google this man and i have the sneaking suspicion that he is a heartthrob. reading on!

god you had me sobbing, but i knew what i was getting into when i read the summary. It was really good, uhm, time for some lame encouraging statement, how about "keep it up"

Gosh. I feel terrible for Grace. Claire is a one of a kind, but she's starting to change. Her life is at its end.

Beautifully written.

To be honest, I agree with Grace. I understand that Claire is going to die, but what she did was really stupid. Live while you have the chance, yes. But don't risk hurting a friendship.

OMG! A fellow Coffee Prince fan? Score!

I officially love you (not in a creepy way), and this brilliant story!

I just want to say that this story gets right down to the heart of it. To me, it shows what real human emotions are during times when you know you're going to loose someone. It shows real, unguarded feelings whether they're good or bad. I'm getting mushy and psychological. xDD Sorry. But I just wanted to let you know that I sincerely enjoyed the story and I can't believe I hadn't read it sooner. :) It was lovely and you write wonderfully.

Wow! What a nice idea about the recording! Very nice touch. It made my little worm of dislike (I named him Jorge) go away. :D I don't miss him.

But anyways, very nice ending! Very, very nice! I've been curious how you were going to somehow make an end to this touching little novella, and I knew that I never would have been able to do it. But you did! And you did it splendidly!

I'm not sure what my stance is on this new Michiko character, but I like her. :) She's sweet, and I'm glad Jae met her, and he sure as heck deserves not to have to live in misery and "I-miss-Claire" for the rest of his life. Pining isn't fun, and I'm glad he seems pretty well done with it. :) Very nice. I am more than satisfied.

Shoe.