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| River That Dance 2008-10-12 ch 12, anon. | abuseI was right, I do love it! I love all the twists and turns this story has and the characters all seem so real! I can't wait for the next chapter and good job so far! |
| River That Dance 2008-10-12 ch 1, anon. | abuseI have a feeling I'm really going to like this story. So far I love Jackie and Alphonso is just an erotic dream come true! |
| fairygirl412 2008-10-12 ch 12,  | abuseDamn cliff hanger. I want to know what happens next so you hsould hurry up and update! lol |
| fairygirl412 2008-10-12 ch 11, | abuseI love this story. I also love the grand mother, so eccentric. I guess it runs in the family, huh? |
| StrawberryPop 2008-10-11 ch 12, | abuseJust finished the latest chapter!! Awesome cliffhanger. I'm guessing, is the bad guy shot by alphonso? hehe brilliant update soon please! thanks, strawberrypop |
| call me Richardson 2008-10-10 ch 12, | abuseo,pleas update soon and dont hurt her! |
| KiraLove 2008-10-10 ch 12, | abuseGASP! If Alphonso shot him, thats going to cause some problems!! She's going to be all traumatized and they might have to have one of their hot make out sessions to make it all better!... --Kira Love |
| Pretzal 2008-10-06 ch 12, | abuseThis is really good! I can't belive you would end it there! If you don't update soon, I will cry to death! |
| daling 2008-10-05 ch 12, | abuselove this chap! |
| MusicallyJ 2008-10-04 ch 12, anon. | abuseAlly come to her rescue i love her distraction that something i would do if i could think striaght |
| sweetbabii45 2008-10-04 ch 12, | abuselmao this has been interesting :) i especially liked the dream part :P |
| MassacreMyliee 2008-10-03 ch 3, | abuseYour story is awesome! Rachel Bilson as Jackie is P e r f e c t. Totally adorable and silly at the same time. Update soon. Keep up the good work! Eh I feel ya on the college crises thing. I soo wish I was a little kid again because of it haha. Good luck! |
| Lady of Confusion 2008-10-03 ch 12, | abuseUPDATE ASAP! |
| ChemicalxDisturbance 2008-10-03 ch 12, | abuseOH GOOD GOD! I hope alphonso shot him. alphonso with a gun would be so sexy. m... FOCUS! sorry. LOVED IT! UPDATE! |
| Weirderest 2008-10-03 ch 12, | abuseMan, Jackie is SO cute. Also, i love how you put up pictures of Rachel Bilson as Jackie because she's adorable also. I love your sense of humor and your writing is style is fantastic. You've really got your characters down to an art, i feel like i know them. They're all brilliantly written, completely original, and Alphonso is to DIE for. I love your story its got a very cool 'The Godfather' element to it, and you should get this published. The grammar and spelling is all perfect, and i would definately pay to read this. I want to jump Al NOW. Or maybe Dante. Either would to for me. I'll write a longer one next time, i just wanted to tell you that i adore this story and i'm SUPER SUPER glad i came across something as original and witty as this. Kudos to you! |