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| Skalpro 2008-07-10 ch 1,  | abuseLoving K so far. she reminded me of George from Dead like me. Maybe that is what the tag represents... hm Love the internal dialogue and the eternal... your interacrions within characters it is great. And it is great to know what the story is about within the first two paragraphs... That is if I hadn't read the turough summary. |
| Nara Merald 2008-04-14 ch 4, | abuseI do love the Hawk. Nariko still needs to remember to go drinking with him, even if it is a little belatedly. Maybe I could get him naked. And Hairy. Ew. Yet rawr. |
| sugary betts 2008-04-14 ch 3, | abusehahaha hilarious ive been in similar situations many many times and they never get less frustrating!! |
| KnittingKneedle 2008-03-08 ch 1, | abuseThis review is brought to you by the review marathon. Haha...I used to work in retail, good god I hated the public. This is something I can totally relate to so good job with that, I love the way you portay what the person is really thinking, because that's what we always think isn't it...I'd be totally up for customercide. 'Oh lots! Goody! Well, I'll just grab the tag that says 'lots' should be next to 'heaps', to the right of 'many' and a couple over from 'a few'. "So that's...four then?" I say dryly' My favourite part of the whole chapter, right therem though the that's four then should be on a seperate line to make it easier to read. |
| Nara Merald 2007-12-03 ch 2, | abuseAh, good old Bitchface. I laughed but I really did pity hop along... it was gross! |
| Jonah Heman 2007-12-01 ch 2, | abuseCleverly written! All the characters were described well, and believable. I enjoyed reading it. |
| Nara Merald 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuseHa ha. Man are people stupid. "Sorry, you can't layby that, it's on clearance." "Why?" "Because it's on clearance." "Why?" "Because we won't be getting anymore in again." "Why?" "Because it's fugly and you're a RETARD!" I wish. xoxo Nariko Smile of a Cheshire Cat. I'm so happy. *cries with happiness* |
| sugary betts 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuseto the complete stranger who wrote this story, a person who i have never spoken to before or had a previous relationship with therefore will review story with complete honesty. a very funny tale (with lets face it a lot of truth and honesty behind the jokes ;) ) something that every1 who has eva worked in retail or been a customer can relate to. cleverly written, i look forward to reading the rest. |