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| Lady Macbeth's Murderer 2008-03-07 ch 4,   | God, I love this!! I can't wit for the next chapter, real cliff hanger there at the end!! |
| SilverFeline 2008-03-06 ch 3, | I didn't get this line. "No inheritance or position to inherit. Everything would go to the legal daughter smacked his head." Is Thistle talking about Faylin? If she's a lady, then how come she has no position to inherit? And the second bit doesn't really make any sense. You also need to work on putting commas in. eg. "She stumbled away from Thistle who waved his arm in an attempt to dislodge the raging artic cross." It should be, "...from Thistle, who waved..." But it's actually a really intriguing story. that half-humans can even be considered as pets. |
| SilverFeline 2008-03-05 ch 2, | Oh love the last two bit. It sounds so cool. But anyway, I couldn't figure out if Faylin is at the school or not, or if she just goes there...but then why isn't she ever at school? |
| SilverFeline 2008-03-05 ch 1, | First off, her's should be hers. Anyway, in the middle of the first chapter, Vivian and faylin are talking, but you keep putting "she" instead of their names. I found it quite confusing. You should also elaborate. If Faylin is the main character (in the chapter) she should have paragraph or even a sentence with her thoughts about Jonathan. And Kyuu never finished his sentence about being a hybird. I'm guessing human? Because he can speak. And the magic is very unusual. Or it just seems like that to me... |
| Lady Macbeth's Murderer 2008-03-02 ch 3, | It a really good story, I like the way you end chapters and the way you build up the chracters. Really good! |
| Snow Wolf Alpha 2008-02-26 ch 2, | I'm confused, is Kyu a four legged animal or an antro? Look forward to reading more. |
| ShadeOfNyx 2008-02-25 ch 2, | This is good... I like it so far. Kinda reminds me of an old fairy/folk tale or something... Update please! |
| claw 2008-01-03 ch 1, | omg nice consept and a very good story i can't w8 to read the reat of it to find out what happens plz msn me again oh and btw this is the second best of ur stories and is it set slightly in the past well miss u bibi |
| Missmack123 2007-12-16 ch 1, | I'm starting to seem like a stalker aren't I well anyway you have a great imagination. Wonderful story :) ciao ~Mack~ |
| Volvo 2007-12-03 ch 1, | Oh! I like this story! :) |