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| Camilleta 2007-12-20 ch 1,  | abuseLove this one. It's so true. |
| Wolfstar/Razze 2007-11-30 ch 1, | abuseNice job taking a serious subject and not making it sound like wallowing or self pity. You said something about not having good flow in your writing, but it doesn't show through here. The only advice I can offer (since I will never claim to be a poetry master, heh heh) is that you either choose to rhyme throughout the whole thing or you drop the rhymes you already have (be they intentional or not). Anyways, this is a solid piece! |
| xxXEvil MunchkinXxx 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuseWow that is so true, you've dealt with players before haven't you. I know this is true becuase I'm related to one, and he confides in me...maybe a little too much if you know what I mean. Nice poem I really liked it. And I'm really close to posting a story here, I'll let you know when it on the site...or you'll just see if you alerted me. Again nice poem and keep on writing. |
| unshattered 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuseWoah, really great work! I liked the tint of retribution you conveyed through this. "A figment forgotten and gone" - great use of description through 5 simple words. |