Oh oh oh I feel so bad for Mona, is Jake her father? Oh poor poor MOna! Ch four=, bring it on! ~Chibi Stephanie

AHhh, what's with that, who's ashley!!!? And who's Isis?! OH poor Mona, is her dad alive?! Oh I have to read on!

oh my gosh, that's so sad Steph. You sure got a mind. Poor Mona. Great job for first chap, now on to two! ~Chibi Stephanie

Just wait till this gets good, I mean it's good but wait till it gets GOOD. Stephie-baka hasn't wriiten another chaper like in forever, the time at the restraunt thingy with the candle and blowing it out with your nose! Anyway nice story! :)

Interesting enough beginning. Really short. Not very informative. Well, I mean it was informative, but. . . . .in a very bland way. I mean, we don't really care who Mona is. We just know she exists. Maybe your next parts will be better. I'm interested to see why this is posted under Horror. Will look for more parts..