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| William H. Chang 2007-12-05 ch 1,  | abuseVery interesting take on the Western. I like the whole alternate history course you take and the fact that you point to the historical background of the story. The writing's done well, but you might want to go back and fix some grammatical errors that creep in every few paragraphs or so. And I'd definitely recommend working on the transitions between scenes, because the story seems to move way too fast. Otherwise, it's very solid. |
| John Westcott 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseGood God! What an incredible story idea. You are now my number 1 dealer when I want a hit of 'weird west' stories. I could read this stuff for hours. So get writing because I want more! ;) |