"the open-mouthed carousel horses,
they're screaming his frequency."

that broke my heart.

something about the last line kept me staring at this wonderful piece of writing for more then 5 minutes.

This is BEAUTIFUL.
I love this.

i so totally agree with MacKitty on this one. but the way i don't understand it just makes me read it again...and again...and again...and again! not without hoping of understanding, but also falling in love with it.
amazingly sensual, what an attack.

The way you use words is bold and, I think, very brave. You censor no emotion or thought; the honesty of your writing is part of what makes it so appealing. Your diction is out of this world. Every word is a stroke of brilliance; the combined effect of your poem is almost blinding. You are very gifted. I loved this, especially the last stanza. Thanks for posting.

ah, the first few lines are definitely intoxicating.
the mere mention of crushed velvet makes me wish i had in my hands right now so i can remember and touch the texture.

Wonderfully written. Very interesting metaphors, but all in al hauntingly beautiful. ~S.S.

Amazing metaphors :) artful

i think your poems are completely amazing, though a lot of the time i don't understand what they're saying. i just like the way you put the words together. it feels...good. haha. so mysterious.

see ya

oh. i'm completely at a loss. this was breathtaking.