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| tootsie.daul28 2008-01-19 ch 2,  | abusethis is a great story, if only it was updated lately! i'd read it! |
| Halani 2007-12-28 ch 2, | abuseHah. Wow, this story is pretty darn good! Awesome plot and I love the characters. I can't help but burst out laughing at some parts. :) Really good. Loved it! Update soon, pleaase :D Halani |
| SuperCUTEJensen 2007-12-19 ch 2, | abuseinteresting so far...I like it...cant wait to see what happens next...hope you update soon |
| Yellers 2007-12-19 ch 2, | abuselovin the plot Ryder and jesse i love the names please update soon :] |
| Riley Hunter 2007-12-18 ch 2, | abusehaha. I like this story A LOT. Keep posting more chapters! |
| Lady of Confusion 2007-12-18 ch 2, | abusenice...update soon! |
| xxLove2Laughxx 2007-12-03 ch 1, | abuseUpdate Soon! |
| not.a.spoiled.brat 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseaw. why would they send her away?? i mean she has to finish school. michael is such a good bro. how sweet. and andrew sounds like a like dude. well please update soon! |
| red-cowboy-boots 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseHello! Amazing story so far. I just realised this is on harperteen fanlit too(i'm princessofparis over there btw) Anyhoo keep up the good work, this is a great story :) Update! |
| Kioasakka 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseThis seems like it'll be pretty interesting. I can't wait to see how you describe the ranch and place Casey there. :) You may want to proofread a bit before posting a new chapter, though. When you're saying: "I'm so sorry, sir." I reply in mock seriousness. There should be a comma after "sir". You do that with ALL your dialogue that doesn't end in a question mark, exclamation point, or hyphen. I'd also like to suggest that for future stories, try not to cram so many characters and names in at once. I'm still very confused on who's who. In a very short section of the store you introduced Casey, her mom and her dad, her dog, and then all of a sudden we've got Amanda and Carly and a ** from out of nowhere and Mandy and Andrew and Adam and Tyler and Aaron and Morgan-- it's way too much for one chapter. I used to do that, too, and it took a while to stop, but it's a lot better for the reader's sake. Waiting patiently for chapter 2, Kioasakka |
| Riley Hunter 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abusegood chapter! can't wait for the next one! |
| JadeDream 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseThis sounds like its gonna be really good so far. i cant wait to see her in texas...and hear more about her past with tyler. well update soon! |
| Yellers 2007-11-28 ch 1, | abuseinteresting plot Poor thing (but wow she's handling i really well) i can't wait to read more and see where you go with this please update soon |