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| The Peculiar One 2008-01-20 ch 1,  | abuseWow...I adore piano metaphors. x] The second and third stanzas are my favorite. I've always thought that the bass clef utterly makes the masterpiece. |
| a silenced revolution 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abuseI like how the musical descriptions seem to extend metaphorically to other areas. Well done. |
| Chemically Induced 2007-12-01 ch 1, | abusethis is sweet, i think. no one ever writes dramatic monologues anymore, since robert browning, but that was like 500 years ago. its pretty and creates a nice emotional atmosphere of teasing affection, mutual admiration. i dont know if the poem was meant to be more sad; it's not very sad, its mostly happy. which is good. and one more thing: is this two people speaking first person? like the first stanza is the singer and the second is the pianist. i dont know i couldn't figure it out. either way. well done love. :) love, c.induced. |
| Tytherpol 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseyour intro is incredible i think the bass clef and your piano player are both beautiful. i don't like the 2nd line of the 2nd stanza. just detracts and seems redundant you might have said 'beautiful' too much i smiled at "juxtaposition" and "paradox" and how you related rules of words to the bigger thought picture--too awesome |
| heresyisforlosers 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseand maybe someday, your piano player will realize you can only truly appreciate the good when you experience the bad from time to time not that the bass clef is bad. I prefer it. s.t. |