At first, I thought this story would be silly and pretentious and 'wha I'm a poser-goth-emo-chicken'-esque.

Oho, how wrong I was.

I love you characters. They're interesting without being any of the above (especially the chicken part). They have good dialogue too.

Your narrative is makes brilliant use of the first person, which is ultimately compelling. I think it's great.

Instantfavepleaselettherebemoreandgaynesswelikegayness.

I want to roll around in their love...

And grow rainbow flowers and stuff for them.

Because I love them... and they love each other.

Loved it! The characters are so well written and put together, well done and i cant wiat for more.

So, I've decided to open the review window and review as I read. Therefore, if my thoughts seem choppy but akwardly in place with the story, that's why.

Hailey makes me want to shoot myself, by the way. She reminds me of...well...Hailey. That crack-smoking dumb-** bimbo-**. Just...ugh. x'D I think your Hailey is nicer though...maybe. She'd deserve it, though, if Joey totally just lashed out on her **. Total verbal attack for the WIN.

Ollie has some interesting reactions. Like, he want's to throw Joey down and ravish him, but...I get this image of him dramatically pushing the back of his hand to hs forehead, meanwhile tossing his head back and exclaiming "I'm sorry...but I just CAN'T"...And then he runs off, leaving a severely confused Joey behind...

** boy bands for the win.

The combination of Ollie's mom cooking stuff and the smell of food in the next room is making me so hungry right now. D:

About the whole hand through the shirt thing. That has to be one of the most...romantic things EVAR. I'm not really into romance [not todays whole rap on it], but this was just too facking adorable...

Stop with the food. Jeeze. Dx

I can't wait to meet Zak either...but I have to get off the computer now...so I guess I'll have to read the rest later. D:

Sorry if this review was wierd...and lame, but it was easier than reviewing after reading. :']

PEACE.

Oh, I totally saw that gay thing coming. Oh yes.

I love Joey's train of thought. It's magnificent. Just the way it's written...It fits so well. It's really hard for me to explain, but it's great and easy to relate to [well, for me anyways...I don't know about anyone else].

Can't wait for more...after...I read the next two chapters...o_o;

Ah...It's good to have you back. :'D
*rushes off to next xhapter*
Mehehe...>_>;;

Oh man. Man oh man. I seriously hope that Joey DOESN'T have some mental disorder. That'd be sad. Because, well--then that'd mean I have a mental disorder, because I imagine the same thing as him. I mean, yeah, I'm plastic, and sometimes I can't even tell when I am, and I imagine a lot of shite and alternate realities, but...argh, nevermind! xD

I totally loved this chapter. Ollie-Jojo interaction, w00t! It is the **, yo. Surprised that he had the nerve to crawl into Ollie's bed, but he seemed like he needed the reassurance that the boogie man wouldn't come and kill him, right? Right.

So, I was like woahing that Joey eats his pancake plain. I do the same. Hm, maybe I'm thinking a little too deep about this? Oh well. But anyway, I like Ollie's future ideal: a ** star. Yeah, that'd do. I mean, he certainly looks that part! Just joking, roflmao.

Totally tripping over the fact that he wanted to be a teacher though. Never could imagine someone like him as a teacher--but then again, there's a lot of things that I can't imagine. Like seeing my mom in an itsy bitsy teeny weeny yellow polka-dot bikini. Yeuch.

Jojo's finally falling apart and being pulled together to be real. I'm so happy that he's opening up and blooming! Ah, I can't help but go on and on about how awesome it'd be to see the total and read Joey. Although, I just don't understand why he can't see that he's beautiful--in his own way. ;[ Really, he needs more self-esteem (although, I can't help but say that I don't have any to give, since I have nonexistant esteem).

GREAT CHAPTER! Woot!

Maybe I'm being a pretentious douchebag... but I think this is helping you. :3 Like, writing this story. Writing out what Joey feels.

Haha, I think I'm over-analyzing this. XD;;

Either way~ When Ollie called Joey "Plastic," it made me giggle. x'D New nickname, lulz.

This whole chapter gave me warm and fluffy feelings, haha~ I love Ollie so much! :'3 If I get any free time, you're getting fanarts. :O

As per usual, I'm going to tell you to hurry your ** up and update (15,0 words already?! :O). XD

Love you~ ♥

D'aw. ;3;

Joey has problems. (Well, Ollie thinks so, but Joey doesn't eardfgklnjadlfkgnh):0 I find that... kind of funny. >_>;; And a little scary.

NEEDZ MOAR ZAK LOLOL. Not really. I mean, take you time on getting there and stuff. 8D;;

LOL, so I got this message that said "You must wait 30 seconds before submitting another review", and I thought it said "30 minutes" so I was all "AHH D:". But it didn't say that. So I waited 30 seconds and here I am, reviewing. 8D!

Poor Ollie and Joey and their problems. It was really sweet how Joey touched Ollie through his shirt. Zak sounds interesting. Maybe ominous? >_>

I said I'd do it and I'm doing it! >:U Lulz

The best part in the chapter was when Ollie fell intentionally. So cute~ :3 He'll abuse himself just for Joey's love~

Why do I have that irksome feeling, that Jojo's last thought is an ominous one? o_o No, srsly. It has an ominous ring to it: as if it's a bad thing that Zak'll be coming. I mean, really. Ollie is like a good boy, but we reviewers know nothing of what Zak really is (barring what Ollie likes to boast on and on about). For what IslashWe know, Zak could be some pervert on ice-crack, or, or. Someone with pyschic abilities (hence the pyschological degree).

Anyway. This was an awesome chapter. Cheers for the fact that Jojo is getting more real! Hah! I was waiting for that. Boo to Kailey, and waho~! Kailey can't get any homework. A big slap to all those ignorant highschool students, who don't notice Joey's change of attitude. ;[ Sometimes, you gotta wonder about society's lameass ideals, y'know?

Though I agree with Joey about middle school being total suckage. I mean, all I did was try to be a prepubescent teenager, and that didn't work out so well. All I got was a lot of pimples, awkward stages, body odor, and a lot of hate from my fellow peers. 'Cos I was a teacher's pet (without trying), and I was naturally gifted in every stupid subject at school. I hate school still, damnit. Argh, brings back stupid memories. Stupid, stupid...xD

Sadness. Lots of sadness with Ollie. He's so emo. I'm tempted to call him femin-NINE. Get it, feminine? Lol. 'Cos he's so complicated and that. Honestly, whenever I can't dubb someone or something, I usually call itslashheslashshe feminine. I know, I'm a real jerk. Whatever.

I wanna see Zak. Is he a pervert? Does he have a girlfriend? Will he try and sex up Jojo?! ZOMG. My imagination is doing cartwheels! Make it stop, make it stop!

Of course, by updating, mwhahahahah.

[Cue more evil laughter, as by the retarded reviewer, AKA RR]

Enjoyable read. :3

Oh, man. XD I hope I'm not the only one who thought of Z when Ollie mentioned Zak. o3o Maybe it's the name. Maybe I'm insane.

Either way~ I wanna meet him, too. :3

AND POOR OLLIE. JEEZ. Meanie-head. ;o; But the messed up characters are always the best. :'D Hur.

As per usual, I can't wait to read more, darling~ ♥ Love you!

For some reason, I really like Joey. :3 He's such a ** to everyone on the inside, and, I guess, I can relate to that.

Your dialogue is great, too. XD "Elle oh elles, I b ghey." Hilarious~

And, have I ever mentioned to you how much I ** LOVE the word "**tard?" Because I do. Because of you. X'D

Update real soon, mkay? ♥ Love you~

I forgot to mention in my first review, on how absolutely, positively fake Joey is. Like, really though. I can be as plastic as him, but I really rather not. It's better to be what I am, then hide behind a facade. I really hope he learns that, 'cos maybe that's what's Ollie is trying to teach him? Oh, I don't know. I hate being friggen' presumptuous and shite.

Uhm, this was a so-so chapter. I positively adored the beginning though. ;] The Ollie-Jojo interaction was something I had to grin at: never knew an emo could play piano. Just joking! I have nothing against the scenesters or emos, but sometimes y'know?

Ugh, I sound so judgmental now. Ignore what I said a few lines earlier, yeh?

Anyway, -I- don't know how to play Mary had a little lamb. I'm like, piano-disinclined. When I play, only loud, ugly sounds come from the piano. I hate it, lol. But not entirely. My friend plays pretty awright, though. She's awesome at it.

This chapter had Joey becoming more real. Can Ollie effectively break through Joey's plastic-fake barrier? I hope so, darnit. The suspense is killin' me! xDD

&love @ the trip that Ollie did, just to see how concerned Joey could be. That's cute, taking a fall. Get it--taking a fall? O_O