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| XxXKristie marieXxX 2007-12-03 ch 1,  | abuseAww very nice story. I love this. Good work KRistie Marie |
| dress her up in fairytales 2007-11-30 ch 1, | abusei have heard that we are always our own biggest critic. |
| Wish Bone 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuse"than she looked in the mirror…" 'Then' instead of 'than.' I also thought it was somewhat bland. It was really more like a short story besides the format. I really think you would've benefited with more metaphors and similes. ~WB |
| poemkitten7 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseOmg. This is so good. Very realistic and heartfelt. I absoutely love it. Going in my favorites. :) -Sara |
| angeloftheninthorder 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseHow beautiful of a writing. It depicts reality perfectly. |
| wishing.on.echoes 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abusethan she looked in the mirror… You should use then instead of than. This was ah-maz-inng thought. I really like this. |