Reviews for Backing Up Forwards

Wish Bone
2007-11-29
ch 1,

Not to be rude, but this poem just seems awkward to me, and nothing really relates to anything else.

First of all, I don't understand the title. 'Backing up Forwards' seems like it could be meaningful, but it doesn't relate to the piece at all. It also just seems like you stuck in words so the beat would stay the same, superfluous words, and so it could be a "forced rhyme."

i.e. "gotta be a mind so misty" almost reminds me of the way a rapper would articulate himself.

"hand in glove" is an awkward phrase. It makes sense but it's just not what we're used to, and it's obvious that you used it for rhyming purposes.

I also agree that this piece is probably not done, and the thing that irks me the most is how the title doesn't go 'hand in glove' with the actual piece.

Sorry this was long, and I hope you didn't take my review the wrong way.

~WB

I.O.K.O
2007-11-29
ch 1,

Good thing those "concrete" poems can't be posted. They're never thought provoking.

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