Try omitting the fin; I think it is too much like The End.
Was this story supposed to be from an androgynous narrator's point of view? That's what it comes across as.
And there's two paragraphs of the first kiss, but extremely similar. Consider merging the two.
It's a great story, though. And I like the ending!

This story is beautiful and sad at the same time, I am sorry i have nothing constructive to say in the way of changing it. You captured the emotion very well and didn't over shoot the way some people do when writing emotional pieces.