|Reviews for 2:10|
| Damned to heaven 4/17/10 . chapter 1
Wow. That was sinister.
| Icyfire4w5 11/23/08 . chapter 1
You have filled this short story up with lots of vivid little details, good! I think that you have chosen the perfect setting. The final scene reminds me of "The Tower" in Tarot.
| lucid-psyche 5/14/08 . chapter 1
Very nice! A couple of nitpicks on the writing style, mostly. You have a tendency to use a lot of commas and dependent clauses - which, in itself, isn't a bad thing. Perhaps some of the clauses could be linked with an "and" instead of a comma? The second sentence, however, doesn't flow very well; the comma after "marble floor" might work better as a semicolon because it's linking two complete sentences.
Also, in the third paragraph, you say, "at a poster store for 5." Do you mean $5? You might want to specify.
Anyway, that's all I've got right now; this is definitely one of the better stories I've read on FP (as are the other two in this series). Keep writing!
| BeliefInSquirells 11/30/07 . chapter 1
Just..."oh my goodness that was fantastic" wow.
I liked how the ending was a surprise. I certainly wasn't expecting it. The imagery and atmosphere was great.
It's a favorite for sure.