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| IiotComputerLetMeOn 2008-06-21 ch 1,  | abuseSounds like this could be a cute story! |
| Teffie 2008-06-02 ch 1, | abuseI love your title! (It's also the name of a song I danced to, hee hee.) This is a good start. I didn't spot any grammar mistakes. Lanna seems interesting too. She's a strong narrator. "traditional girl that people saw me as." I don't think you're supposed to end a sentence with a conjunction. I like the idea of a noble girl wanting to be a writer. Your story resembles The Princess Bride ("farm boy") and Harry Potter (“You’ve got ink on your hands, did you know?”) in places. I'm not sure if you did that on purpose or not. Overall, good plot, characters, and grammar. Nice work. |
| SimplyFae 2008-05-31 ch 6, | abuseAh, it was so good i had to comment on it twice... it's so SAD T.T oh to be in love... it's on the same level of intensity as romeo and juliet (minus the randomly stupid actions and everyone dying in the end) I LOVE your writing style! |
| SimplyFae 2008-05-31 ch 1, | abuseAw, you actually turned this into a story! ^_^ love it, it's so sad... Now I see was the girl in Simple cried from reading her mom's story... |
| Element Goddess 2007-12-04 ch 1, | abuseOh wow! This story was amazing. The ending actually had me crying. Amazing job, really. |
| adoh 2007-12-03 ch 1, | abuseThis was absolutely brilliant. I got so attached to the characters that I cried at the end. It was so touching, and, and...! I can't even see the screen 'cause my eyes are blurring up again and I feel retarded. |
| NverBeenKissed 2007-12-01 ch 1, | abuseI think tis story is GREAT! It has a true fairy tale quality. I especially liked the ending. So sad. I loved it. It was very touching. |