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| son of frost 2007-12-02 ch 1,  | abuseThanks for the review you gave me. I thought I'd return the favor. Anyway, here goes! Very nice poem, I enjoyed the repetition and the absolute simplicity of the poem, which I feel portrays very well the innocence and simpleness of real love. (I noticed one line that reads "When your breathe hits my cheeks", I know you meant "your breath", but it's a simple mistake). Again, very good writing! |