Hey there, it's the In Our Element's Writer, L here (Creves' writer). Sorry for the long due and I'm gonna review here.

This is good. There are enough of both physical and mental descriptions that keeps the story interesting.

And then I see you've a great way of keeping the reading in suspense (from the start) until the end. I'd say its brilliant. I think I'll take a look at your actual story when I have the time.

Anyway, sorry again for the late review. I'll take a look at your other works (hopefully soon enough) and thank you for reading In Our Element.

Happy writing.

L~

SURPRISE! I have decided to review all the non-winners of the Review Marathon, because everyone deserves some review lovin', right? ^^;

Onto the review we go!

Darn! This was short yet very poignant! I like that combination. This man is spoken of so..well..I don't know the word..but it makes me really interested in him. The whole right and wrong discussion was a definitely wonderful add, and I liked the opening line.

Job well done. :)

- Frac

"There was absolutely no need to challenge authority, and even if he had the courage to do so," I feel like the comma should be after the 'and.'

On the other hand, I really enjoy the discussion of what is 'right.'

Hi. This is Equilibrium form In Our Element. I checked out your profile, saw the summary, and decided to take a peek... Now I must say... My Gosh (note the capitals) ... your descriptions are awesome. And the morality issues the protagonist faces are so potent and intriguing. You say this is a snippet from Break the Silent Requiem? Well, then I absolutely HAVE to read that. I'm gonna check it out now...

^.^ Bye.

That really drew me in. I liked the description and the balance is nice.

Just one thing I noticed:

What (is) freedom, anyway?

And where exactly are you posting the chapters? I am curious.

Colors! I like it. Very good detail.

--LR

This is good, it just drew me in and is so realistic. Very cool. Kdh.

Hmm. Interesting. I can't say any more right now since it was kinda short, but I like the idea. I'll try and read the prologue once you get it up.
Ashe

I really like this story and I would love to read more. Please keep up the good work and good luck with finishing your story ^^
~Snowin

Nice!
Is magic bad? What is a taking? Why did he see this fire?
Could you answer some of these questions with your next chapters?
Please ^_^

Great stuff: light-hearted and depressing at the same time. This is gonna be good!

You might want to fix the sentance which says "What he didn’t know was that they feared more than magic." It doesn't really make sense.

Perhaps you could change it to something like:

What he didn't know was that magic wasn't the thing they feared the most.

or

Magic wasn't the thing they feared the most, even if he didn't realise it.

or

Even if he didn't realise it, magic wasn't the thing they feared the most.

I'm getting a bit carried away. There's a million ways to put it, but it needs fixing cause it interrupts your narrative. Keep on posting. I think you'll do well with this.

Good start. Nice title. I like your opening. Doubting authority always make things interesting as does death. Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have an excellent day.

~Twilight Starr~