Reviews for The Setting Sun - FictionPress.com

Wish Bone 2007-12-01 ch 1,	abuseI thoroughly enjoyed this poem. It is deep and personal: two traits I specifically like. I just have a problem with the ending. It almost turns to a different PoV, as if someone had been watching you all along, but all we see is YOUR PoV. It would've worked out better if you had been constantly italicizing what an onlooker would've seen, and it could've been more interesting. It could have gone like Your PoV/His PoV/Your PoV/His PoV And et cetera. Just a suggestion, though. Happy writing. ~WB
smile for the sunshine 2007-12-01 ch 1,	abuseDamn. I like this a lot but the only problem with that is that I thought of an (amazing) idea for a poem during dinner but it included a setting sun and now you are going to think i was copying off of you and I wasn't...Sisters think too much alike...It honestly is different but I don't want you to think it's the same...I wrote it for my friend that I asked you to pray for...Please don't be mad okay? I didn't mean to copy you at all. sigh it's different though. trust me. but good work here. = )
Artemis Anderson 2007-12-01 ch 1,	abuseWow. Great job.