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| Wish Bone 2007-12-01 ch 1, | abuseA little too abstract. I can't even grasp what this poem is about. And although the poem is full of nice, flowery words, they seem random next to each other. 'Lopsided absences' makes no sense to me. I like the 3rd and 4th lines, though. I wish you might expand on that. Also, I'm curious about the reference to the daemon 'Vanth,' if that is indeed whom or what you wrote about. ~WB |
| shadows of a trackless sea 2007-12-01 ch 1, | abuseVery nice wording of this poem. So many times peple use simple words over and over again but you obviously have an excellent vocabulary. Very nice work. |