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| Leaves of Labefaction 2008-08-04 ch 1,  | abuseI like the first too lines, but the last line seems awkward. The last line should be something more to tie them together, and really 'get away from me' seems so emotionless and flat. Just some friendly criticism, really. Keep writing, -LoL |
| ohthevoices 2008-07-16 ch 1, | abuseReview game! I liked the whole concept here, and how you got it across, especially the second line, "even my skin can feel it," because it seems to give it that added meaning. I didn't really like the last line...it didn't feel like it lived up to the rest of the haiku, to me. |
| Amarone. 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseBold, and straight to the point. I love that 'smashin'(haha, I don't know how else to put it) last line. |
| simpleplan13 2008-06-06 ch 1, | abuseI LOVE that second line. It's a really great description. |
| PrincessPeaches 2008-05-21 ch 4, | abuseAww, this one is kinda sad. Kinda seems like something out of a horror film too! |
| PrincessPeaches 2008-05-21 ch 3, | abusewhoa! I don't know what else to say about that one... |
| PrincessPeaches 2008-05-21 ch 2, | abuseInteresting...sweet, but the ending is strange. lol |
| PrincessPeaches 2008-05-21 ch 1, | abuseI love Haikus! They are soo fun! This is brilliant! |
| review 2007-12-12 ch 1, | abusewhoa lots of eh...graphic haikus! they made me laugh. cuz i just watched saw3 and its like SO SICKENING O_O < (sorry for the ADD moment there) but i think you did well in putting the morbid aspect into these haikus. lots of blood-imagery. good work, needless to say. |