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| JJ March 2008-03-19 ch 1,  | abuseThis is just a tiny thing, but in the 6th line (I sunk to the bottom...) there's a problem with the verb tense of sunk, I'm pretty sure it should be sank. Like I said, minor detail, I just pick them out sometimes...but I really like the format of the poem, with the italicized words at the end of each line. I think that makes it different from other similar pieces, and hey, haven't we all been there! x |
| J. M. Dusk 2007-12-25 ch 1, | abusethis is amazing M.J. you amazing me and you're such a strong person |
| Thomicas 2007-12-11 ch 1, | abuseA pretty good piece. I do, however, get the feeling that I've read this before. I'm not calling you a copycat, don't get me wrong, but it's a little unoriginal if you catch my drift. It's still well written though, I know how good it feels to just write down whats on your mind. Keep it up! ~Thomas |