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| Immortal Butterfly 2007-12-06 ch 1,   | Wow... So, are you a Christian? This was a little confusing in that aspect. Don't be afraid to answer. I am. A Christian, that is. This was well written. I noticed a few grammar mistakes. It was also a little confusing, maybe giving the posessed man a name instead of calling him "he" or calling Jesus "Jesus" and not "he". Unless you meant for it to be confusing, dark and beautiful. Then you suceeded with flying colors. |
| Thomas Rex 2007-12-02 ch 1, | This is really cool, very vivid, very terrifyingly beautiful. And yet I bet I can yet break deeper into it. Good job. |