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| Rainbowelectric 2008-06-28 ch 1,  | abuseah, damn you and your one shots... This was absolutely adorable. I loved it. Derrick probably seething in the shadow of his brother Daniel, wanting to catch Wade's eye and it was all for not. Fortunately he decided to take the bull by the horn, so to speak and make a move. I love your narrative voice, it's wonderful and has terrific flow and you've got a great ear for dialogue. And such great details. I loved it immensely. And of course, ti would go with out say that there's just so much potential fro more sotry here, you know, just in case your muse were to ponder it for a bit.. Oh hte possibilities. I know, just shoot me. I'm ag reedy bastard, I can't help myself. |
| nonaccount 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseCute. I would have liked to see more resolution, I guess, at the end, but this was sweet too, "this was definitely better than anything would be with Daniel ...". :) |
| Ty Taco 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseI liked it. I thought it was ADORABLE. Your one-shots are REALLY good. :) xoxoxoxoxoxo, Ty |
| multiples of six 2007-12-05 ch 1, | abuseOh, this is cute. I love the "spooning" line. Nice! =) |
| thatsmyname 2007-12-03 ch 1, | abuseOh. My. God. THIS IS THE SHIZNIT!! I |
| firestar267 2007-12-03 ch 1, | abuseAww sweet as hell, very well written, loved it :) |
| gummybaby 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseShoot. You just come up with the sweetest oneshots. I love happy endings and all that good goey awness. That was great. |
| authordream4life 2007-12-02 ch 1, anon. | abusevery well done! I loved it--your romances always make me smile! Fantastic work, keep it up! |
| FallenHeroYuudai 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseAww how cute! Rock on for mentioning MCR and the BP! Long live the BP! Anyway, um yeah, you probably should fix the ending later but if you want to leave it like that it's okay. It's good I like it! -FHY |
| Comawhite13 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseThis is very cute. :) Good work. |
| Back of Beyond 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseNice one-shot, though I felt it ended a bit too quickly. But you said you might fix the ending anyway, so it's all good. :] |
| poupre a monte 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseaw this story is cute ! |
| Momoro 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseHmm I really like the concept and the writing is good, but Wade just seems to change his mind too quickly... it's like "ew"... "Oh wait I love you" I think maybe Wade needs a little self reflection moment in there? Mm just a suggestion. :D |