Wow!! That was funny and awesome. Seriously you could get that published. Well, you'd have to get an editor. :) That's okay, I love it. I think you didi a good job with the epilogue so that it didn't become a tragedy. Great!!

I wish she'd make him tell her why he's changed instead of telling him seh loved him. They'd never have kids, that's for sure, he couldn't handle her putting her attention on other people at all.

But then again, I thought they met when she was in highschool right? And she's been out of high school for three years and they never once 'did it'? Were they on and off? And I guess she calls him sir because he was her teacher [meant to say this earlier], interesting.

Max is a weird one. Here's a question, for someone who's touring the world to get inspiration for the next great american novel earlier on in the story she didn't seem at all interested in touring any of the states, only after they grabbed Robby did she really seem to tour places.

Salley, I don't know what I make of Salley, but I hope she's watching her back because Max seems like he doesn't want her to even have female friends.

Max is a weird one. Seriously, he's so desperate and clingy but he's *not*, i don't know, it's just weird. And he's a manipulative little bastard, lol.

"What the hell kind of stupid suicide attempt his this?” I snapped, “It requires other people!”"
That made me laugh though. I really don't find Max endearing, which is surprising cause i adored your other psychopath, lol. But then again he was needy and not controlling.

And I like the way you developed her relationship with Robby, like the fact that they're so laid back about everything, hahah, at her making him keep a dead jelly fish because his arm didn't get all rashy, lol.

LOL at him punching the manly bartender, they both seem so old fashion at times, though there doesn't seem to be any feeling of a relationship between them. They're more like friends that tolerate each other. Well, and she has a crush on him. But I really like the way you build characters in such a short period of time.

You have a thing for angry desperate guys don't you? Lol, Interesting beginning i like the fact that you pointed out that normally he doesn't show sorrow but here he's actually begging.

And the fact that she calls him Sir is strange to me, lol, is that because she's keeping with the whole Victorian drama thing? Because it's a nice way of her to distance herself from him during the break up, lol, but if that was how she addressed him during the relationship, it would be a bit strange.

Nice road trip. I figured they would have made love to each other and Max would have died during the event. I'm glad that they went to Ohio and a big event happened there, because that's where I'm from.

~SirScott

Aww, that's so cute. You put Robby in jail?! He can't be in jail! I can't marry him in a sequel if he's in JAIL! Haha, just kiddin. But if you do make a sequel, tell me, I wanna read it. (: You did a great job on this story, you should be proud

-Gabrielle

Why thank you, I'm glad I helped (: Are they really gonna split up though? Because of that dead girl? Dang, that stinks. They're a cute couple. Ooh, you should make a sequel. Have Max find someone else (preferably me (: haha, or some other chick) and have Addy find someone else too (Ooh! She can have Sir Scott! lol, or some other dude (and I am sorry, Sir Scott, if you are not a dude, I'm just guessing here))

Other than all that, I loved the chapter! Great job!

-Gabrielle

Aw, I take back all the mean things I have ever thought about Max, because I love him now. Adelina can go back to Sally, I want Max. Haha, just kidding. If only he were real, lol, I loved the chapter. Make Adelina stay with Max! They are cute together. (:

-GN Perone

The thing with Sally was a bit weird, but okay. Max needs to tell Addy what happened in his past with Natalia before my brain bursts! (: Great chapter

-GN Perone

Aw, he is so sweet. Sally is getting in the way a lot, but ooh, she can have Robby. I give him up to her. -sniff- She needs him more than I do. Haha, good chapter though (:

-GN Perone

That was interesting. I never thought of a tire iron and a jack as being funny looking. I just knew Sally was gay.
I am in wonder as to why Max acts the way he does.

~SirScott

Sally a good addition to this story. I wonder if they will make to Kentucky or Ohio or any other Eastern state.

~SirScott

Oh my god. Robby was awesome! Put me in the story and bring Robby back and make him my boyfriend! lol, can I keep him? I love the story, a dedicated fan of Robby and an official Max-hater. lol, haha. But I'm sure Max will turn out okay eventually.

And thanks for your reviews on my stories, they're very appreciated. (:

-Gabrielle