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| follow the night light 2008-08-02 ch 6,  | abuse*dances* YUR ALIVE!! thank goodness, i'm jus happy you updated :D |
| midnight123 2008-08-01 ch 6, | abuseits great continue maybe a bit more of romance or something but it really good |
| Silencia 2008-01-27 ch 6, | abuselove it!! |
| animefreakgirl 2008-01-27 ch 6, | abuseIt's an awesome story you've got going so far. I'm really enjoying it. I'll be waiting until your next chapter is up. :) Keep up with the awesome stroy and writing of course. :) |
| follow the night light 2008-01-13 ch 2, | abusebrother, when i read the first begining chaps, it made my heart ache... |
| Silencia 2008-01-12 ch 5, | abuseHHAA! Way to go Josh!! Love it!! dont stop writing! ;) |
| Simplyerickah 2008-01-12 ch 5, anon. | abuseIt's amazing I'm glad to have been able to read this chapter...I'm looking forward to your next one. Keep writing this story. :) |
| I'm the Evil Twin 2008-01-02 ch 4, | abuseWoot! Woot! she got a boyfriend...aw it is so sweet...i love it! |
| Silencia 2008-01-02 ch 4, | abuseaww, I'm soo happy! Soo cute of him! |
| hotcheri 2008-01-01 ch 3, | abuseaw,sweet!i like the way michelle thinks its a joke n she so guarded!!write more!! |
| cyanidecandy 2007-12-31 ch 3, | abusethis sounds like great stuff :) keep on updating !! the chapters are kinda short though. leaves me hanging ah. |
| ObliviousWanderer 2007-12-31 ch 1, | abuseThis is so good! Keep it up! : ) |
| Silencia 2007-12-31 ch 3, | abuseLet me tell you, I love this story, it really has a meaning and its really cool that the coolest guy really uses his brains (and I really want to kick that Tatianas but, really what a ** she can be)and please check out my story, maybe you can get a little inspiration from it, and while you're there you can leave a message :D And PLEASE UPDATE SOON! I'M REALLY CURIOUS WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!:D |
| xxily4everxx 2007-12-24 ch 2, | abuseooh! soo interesting ! ^^ |
| xAdorablexAngelx 2007-12-03 ch 1, | abuseOkay, it was nice. I like the idea and plot. A little over used but it's always nice to see new ideas in them... A few tips: 1: The beginning, Michelle opened her eyes and glanced at the clock next to her bed. It was 6:30am. She sighed and climbed out of bed. It was her second week back at school for her final year of high school. You could have done, for more detail and better flow: Michelle opened her eyes and glanced at the clock next to her bed. A sigh flowed through her lips as she saw it was six-thirty, time to get up. She climbed out of bed with slight regret, not wanting to go to school. Since she was in her last year of high school she was pretty used to being ignored as if she were invisble to everyone, but now that school had just started up the week prior, it just started all over again. Well, not all over again. She showered and then dressed before running downstairs to an empty house yet again. Her mother liked to pretend that Michelle didn’t exist. She was always out partying and clubbing, barly ever home. Her father had never been in the picture. 2: The populars would not say like that much. “I so like, went to this awesome party. It was totally awesome and everyone was like, drunk and like, dancing.” Heather replied. She may say it once but the second time and the way she said it sounded as though she was one of those chessey girls from those chessy movies. Good luck and with love, Rissa |