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Shannon 2008-01-19 ch 14, anon.	abuseomG i CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT ONE THIS WAS AWESOME. i WANT JAYDEN AND HER TO BE TOGETHER. sorry about the caps I'm in a hurry
Shannon 2008-01-12 ch 10, anon.	abuseI need more Jayden!
Shannon 2008-01-12 ch 9, anon.	abuseOMG yes yes yes, but no no no. He kissed her in front of Vincent.OH I hope they get together though.
Shannon 2008-01-12 ch 8, anon.	abuseSorry I haven't been here for a while. Thanks for the shout-out. Keep it up! Shannon
xwordslingerx 2007-12-28 ch 2,	abuseHmm... Jayden seems like a pretty interesting person. Sounds like my type of guy XD I like the way you’re introducing characters. It’s not usually the accepted style, to just describe people but I think in this case it works. shrugs Just my opinion... Some errors: All I can say is that they are, Lucky! - no comma, no capital letter in lucky. Nothings wrong. - Apostrophe between g and s in nothings. My eye’s were dead set on the new guy right in front of me - No apostrophe in eyes. You are SO going to hate me by the end of this. XD But I can’t help but notice these things!! Oh by the way, thanks for the response to my other review! It’s nice to some people can actually take the time and reply! =)
xwordslingerx 2007-12-28 ch 1,	abuseSomebody's probably already pointed this out already but I'm going to do so anyway. XD I quickly checked myself in the mirror before I even graced her with my presents. That should presence, not presents. I did not buy you those clothes so you can ignore them and me for that matter. I'm pretty sure there should be a comma after them, or possibly ellipses... (yeah, those things XD). But I'm not sure. Anyway, this story is pretty good so far! I'm gonna go read chapter 2 right now! =)
Shannon 2007-12-28 ch 6, anon.	abuseThis chapter did not suck. I loved it. You need to give yourself more credit! Can't wait for more.
Brittany 2007-12-27 ch 5, anon.	abuseMan, I love your stories! I'm kind of worried on were these two are heading and what's going to result from it, but all in all, this story is amazing. You're an amazing writer. Please post more soon.
entirely anonymous 2007-12-19 ch 2,	abuseOkay, spelling... parent’s, parents... You said women once when you meant woman... fall's, falls... defiantly, definitely (I think that's what you meant)... parent's, parents. That's something you should watch, and it's easily fixable. The only place you should put an apostrophe (') is when it's a contraction or possessive. You tend to put them in when a word is just plural. [= It's just something you should try and catch. As well as commas, still, in the wrong place sometimes, nonexistant sometimes. But I repeat, it's well and carefully written, and easily fixed, so don't be discouraged! Maybe just have a friend (or an online friend; fellow writer preferably) proof-read it and help with that spelling and grammar. =]
entirely anonymous 2007-12-19 ch 1,	abuseCouple spelling errors... travel’s should be travels, presents should be presence, stair's should be stairs, that's all I caught. And several places there should have been commas, a couple incomplete sentences, but all-in-all it was carefully written. And good job, keep writing, etc.
Shannon 2007-12-14 ch 4, anon.	abuseHey, ok so Jaydon sounds...amazing. I really liked the chapter! I also loved that they kissed. He seems like he's hiding something too!. So yeah I wanna know what's gonn happen with them. PMS Shannon aka gatekid1
Jackieee 2007-12-13 ch 1, anon.	abuseI love the way you write! Im excited to read the next chapters :) Its always interesting reading your stories.
Brittany Finch 2007-12-13 ch 3, anon.	abuseWoW, this story is really great! I love it. I'm so glad your writing again. I really like this Jayden guy though! and I'm sorry it took me so long to get to this. Anyway, please post more as soon as you can! `Brittany
Shannon 2007-12-10 ch 3, anon.	abuseOMG. I want them to get together so bad! I hope she's not an alcoholic, cuz that can mess thinds up. shannon aka gatekid1
Ur Mom Thinks I'm Cool 2007-12-09 ch 2,	abuseJayden sounds pretty hot. Haha.

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