This is amazing!! I love it! I just had two things I noticed. One: in the first line you put "So you've been though a mess" Though should be through. and two: In your first chorus I thought that the last line: "And you won't be healed until you're broken into pieces." I'm not sure exactly what your beat is for the chorus but the beat I had in my head while I was reading it mad it sound better if you replace into with just to. "And you won't be healed until you've broken to pieces." Just a couple of suggestions. I really love this though. It is amazing. Keep writing you are wonderful.

Oh, that was so beautiful, it'll go in my favorites! I loved your message, and your rhyming fitted so well! Your use of the chorus was so powerful, and your verses was great! One slight thing that I noticed about your grammar, was that you'd written "though" instead of "through". And maybe you didn't need to have the headlines for each new verse? I think it disturbed a little, nothing major though.
Great as always! Keep at it!
The Reverse Edge Blade

This is a good concept but this song lacks rythym it doesn't flow it has something missing to it.

Very good song. One of the better ones I've seen on this website, so well done! Write on! :)

~Anna~ ^_^