i love this
it's so beautiful :]

So like, this is gorgeous Livia! The title and all the ambiguity and double meaning. I love love the title and I prefer the line breaks and I really want to work on this with you when I get home. It is amazing, and if you keep revising it could be so brilliant.

In the poem you sound miserable. Poor Livia.

And I want to hear the new Sufjan mp3s for sure!!

I need sleep now...

both beautiful, as are the words.
i do prefer the first. it illustrate what I percieved as the feeling.

like the words sound like what the situation felt like. it makes no sense, but its true.

this is amazing.

ahh, i love this.
personally, i prefer the prose version of this.
i think it makes the repetition you use stand out more,
and makes it more... URGENT that you 'see their angel bones.'
oh my goodness.
this is simply fantastic.
honestly, you hooked me in the first couple words :]
phenomenal.
gosh, i love big words xD.
anyways.
im going to read some more of what youve written.
again, I LOVED THIS.
xbreanna