Reviews for Spoken On The Breeze

Reviews For: Spoken On The Breeze

GilanSalehi 2008-04-29 ch 5,	abuseGreat chapter. The mysteries keep coming! I wonder who the woman is. You did a good job with spelling and grammar, I didn't notice anything wrong. I curious as to how this develops--will Henry try to save her too? Also, good description in this chapter. I liked how you described the interrogation room. The story progresses at a comfortable pace--just update soon!
GilanSalehi 2008-04-27 ch 4,	abuseAh... things are beginning to flesh out and make more sense. Is the title for the chapter meant to be a pun? After all, he is having trouble with Major White... I noticed because I do that sort of thing all the time. I like where this is going. I'm still curious as to what happened in the cafe that led to the capture of Henry, and why they'd want to capture him. Hopefully we'll get more answers soon! Keep up the great work.
parchment 2007-12-11 ch 3,	abuseYourr writing is excellent. How old are you? Because if your a teenage then you have skill far beyond your years. Plz write the next6 part of the story.
GilanSalehi 2007-12-06 ch 2,	abuseHey, I breezed through these chapters quite quickly. You're a good writer, and that made them speed by. I like the distant tone you take. I'm sort of curious about the alien. Where is she from? What is she doing here (fighting earth people didn't quite satisfy my curiosity)? I have a couple of things to point out, though--if they're underground, how is there a thin stream of light coming from the window? (I assume that's sunlight, although maybe they just aren't very far underground). Also, why the sudden turnaround and torture? It seems like Henry was walking to the cafe with his kid earlier that very morning. It seems odd for him to find himself in a prison cell, nearly without rhyme or reason. I guess this will be explained in the next couple of chapters. Anyway, well done. You've got me interested. Update soon!

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