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| Cross Rose 2008-02-03 ch 1,  | abuseI liked how you used the pharse, "Glass Shards" And I like how you put everything and such into words. Well done :D ~~Cross Rose P.S. Hey, could you by any chance please check out my poems :P ? That is if you have the time. Thank you. |
| xDancingintheRainx 2007-12-10 ch 1, | abuseI didn't like this piece very much. It was really awkward to read and I think it could have been broken up better so the flow would have been at least a little bit smoother. I also wasn't so fond of the repetition of "Yes,". For example: "Yes, you will heal" or "Yes, our friendship will be gone" It just made the piece kind of rocky. I did, however, like the meaning behind the poem. I just think the poem itself needs a little cleaning up. |