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| RedXfire 2007-12-05 ch 1,  | abuseWow.. well hm whats a good review for a sotry like this geez i dont even know. Well for onces i think it just went to fast but if it didnt it would acually be longer for the first chapter LOL so i guess i get it mabye make it more organized or something LOL. hmm also mabye add more detail but hell i'm not wirrting it right LOL. So GOOD JOB I'M looking forward to the NEXT chapter and see what world he would come into |