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Wow. That was good. No, that's a lie. It was excellent! I loved it!

Rebekah

Normally, I don't read poetry, but I actually really liked this. The first and last stanzas were my favorites. They were chilling and dark, but subtly so.

I really, really liked it.

Oh, and would mind clarifying something for me? The last line of the last stanza can be construed in two ways:

-she forgets that she's on the train tracks, as in, she doesn't care that she's on them (Hopefully, that made some kind of sense)

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-she forgets about the train and it winds up hitting her

Originally, I took it to mean that she was hit, because it would fit with the rest of the poem, but I still want to just clear that up.

Awesome job with this!