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| Tristan-the-Dreamer 2008-06-22 ch 1,  | abuse...?... Wow. I would suggest breaking up the words into a couple paragraphs because it's a little hard to read, but wow. This has such an edge, yet it's dreamy, hurt and vulnerable at the same time. Perfect ending sentence, and I love how all the metaphors referring to math were obvious but not obnoxiously in-your-face. Subtle yet overt. If I had to boil this poem down to one sentence, I would choose, "Who the heck are you anyway?" Am I on or off the mark?.. Well done. ~Tris |
| Rukiie 2007-12-06 ch 1, | abusei was never any good at math either i just thought i'd review this because i just posted a math-ish thing on here too. Wouldn't life be easier if it worked like math, but it would also lose some of its dimension. i love how you put this together... 90 in math... never got close to that! |