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| Healing Waters 2008-03-21 ch 1,  | abuseI haven't been on Fiction Press for a really long time. On the way I've grown up. haha my stories sucked. I looked at my reviews and I saw how helpful and encouraging you were to me, even though I really sucked :D! So I decided to look at your stories. I read your profile (HOLY CRAP THAT IS AWESOME YOU ARE GOING TO PUBLISH A BOOK!) In this poem I can relate, lately I have been through some hard times and it hurts. That's what is great about writing. So almost every night recently I've written a poem about my pain. I've only posted one so far. I'll post the other ones later. You are a truly gifted writer. Keep on writing! YOU ROCK! Healing Waters |
| Take the Money and Run 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseThe way this flows is so beautiful, everything is so well described... its so sad, just like angel953's... absolutely amazing job. im really sorry. |
| angel953 2007-12-27 ch 1, | abuseThis. Is. Amazing. I know how you're feeling...that day was truly a tragedy...well you know how they say some good comes from all bad? well i found good in what happened that day...i don't want to tell you on here...so ill tell you at school or on the phone or suttin |
| cakenoodle 2007-12-07 ch 1, | abuseI'm sorry for your loss. Such great description. Write on. |
| valleyofashes 2007-12-06 ch 1, | abuseaw this is nice. i know what its like to lose someone. i lost my brother in a car accident in September 2005. |
| Liebe Dance 2007-12-06 ch 1, | abuseI like this poem. A lot. I can really relate to it. It does a very nice job illustrating the thoughts and emotions that run through one's head a million miles per hour after a loss. The repetive 's' and 't' sounds really add to the feeling of the poem. The short lines starting in "And I can't keep up" add to the rushed, panicky sense that you want to just escape reality, but you can't. I also like the long "i" sound in shortly after that "why, cry, cried, tried." The repetition almost seems desperate, like crying. Very powerful |