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| Zonne 2008-04-20 ch 1,  | abusemore then one you would The above sentence should read "more than one you would" not then Other than that, you did a fantastic job on grammar. Well mostly. When you change speakers you need to start a new paragraph. I liked the explanation. I could envision this as a video game. Saving Santa .. could be all kinds of levels and possibilities. I also loved the ending.. because you didn't ask. Great Keep on writing and being creative Zonne the review marathon (link in my profile) |