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| Stella Grimshaw. 2007-12-07 ch 1,  | abuseThis was really good except for a few things, I think the plot line could be made into a novel if you felt a bit ambitious, and then the speech of it. It doesn't really feel like the protagonist had a believable character, you should give her more feeling. |