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Aldrea-Draco 2009-08-10 . chapter 8
Aw, so Daniel didn't betray her after all, that's sweet. I was hoping he hadn't; I like him.

I can only imagine what a culture shock it would be to be trapped in a place like that for years and then finally get out. I think the first thing I would want to do would be to get a nice big cheeseburger...
Aldrea-Draco 2009-07-26 . chapter 7
The idiot that I am, I thought I had this story on my alert list to let me know when another chapter was added, but I didn't, or else I would have read this a lot sooner. :X

O, things are really heating up. I have to admire these people for living off of nothing more than those life bushes and eggs, but I guess you do what you have to do in order to survive.

Not to mention how depressing it must have been to get on top of the wall and see the endless maze...

I really like the ending; nothing better than a cliff hanger! Plus I enjoyed Valerie's character. ^^
Kirhava 2009-07-21 . chapter 8
I can’t believe that they’re back!
Please! Don’t take too long to update! I’m dying to know what happens next.
I know that it’s a bit early to ask this, but… how long do you plan on doing this story? I know that it’s impossible to know for sure, but can you give an estimate?
Until the next time,
Kirhava.
Kirhava 2009-07-21 . chapter 7
Hmm that’s strange. I was pretty sure that I reviewed the 6th chapter. Apparently I haven’t.
Ok, then. I have to make up for it:

I absolutely LOVE this story. It’s amazing, unpredictable, and full of rich details.

Congratulations. You have great talent… and imagination.
I wonder why there are so few reviews here. More people should come and read this story, it’s definitely worth the while you spend reading it.

Keep writing. I promise that I’ll follow this story until the end.

Greetings!
Aldrea-Draco 2009-07-09 . chapter 6
It would really suck to have to live like that for years. I wonder if there really is a way out of the maze and a civilization beyond it or something; I'm sure if there is Elizabeth will be able to find it.

Can't wait for another chapter, please update soon! =)
Aldrea-Draco 2009-07-09 . chapter 5
Damn, I don't know what I would have done if I were stuck in the middle of nowhere inside of a maze. I like how resourceful Elizabeth is, it shows just how quick her wit really is. I also enjoyed how you were able to show some flaw in her character before she was able to pick herself back up and keep moving; makes her feel all the more human.

I wonder if these new people are going to try and eat her. That would be scary. o.O
Aldrea-Draco 2009-07-09 . chapter 4
O...things just got really interesting really quick.

Where could she be? Why did they throw her out like that? What do they really use that elevator for, anyway?

I guess I had better keep reading if I want my answers. =D
Aldrea-Draco 2009-07-09 . chapter 3
Awesome, I like how each time she opens the elevator there's a brand new world to explore, and I also enjoy how life-like they all feel. The use of the primitive people's language was wonderfully done, and I like how they ended up being a very hospitable people instead of some savages that you see all too often in movies.

Again, like I said before, your descriptions are amazing, I feel as if I was there with Elizabeth the entire time. =)
Aldrea-Draco 2009-07-09 . chapter 2
Oh wow, I agree with Elizabeth that I could definitely live there, too. The descriptions of that mansion were beautiful, as were the ones of all the plants. I really like how you reach out to a person's senses; you make sure to address the look, feel, sound, and even smell of the place to make me feel right at home.

I also enjoy how your sentences and words are structured; it makes for a very enjoyable and comfortable read. =)

On to the next chapter! I want to see if that penny she threw into the fountain does anything. :D
Aldrea-Draco 2009-07-09 . chapter 1
Very nice, I really enjoy the way you write, especially the dialog in the story. You don't even have to type who said what, and already I can follow the conversations they have very easily. =)

I am intrigued as to what that greenhouse could be, so I better get back to reading so I can find out!

PS: I hate high heels.
Venz0r 2008-06-28 . chapter 1
This is just one of those stories that make me go "Hee-hee".

Part of it was probably the fact that someone named Akbar is in it. Oh, man. You don't even know.

I definitely liked the humor, and the frankness. No nonsense thurr. Kudos, I want to read MOAR.
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