wooh! tough decision there. your story is very realistic. i love it.:D

Wow...

I don't know what to say. It was absolutely thrilling! I'm so glad she did the right thing and broke it off with Davey.

You did a fantastic job at this story! Great work!

oh my word!that was flipping amazing!!i would definately read this if you decided to continue it!wow.. loved it :)

Awesome writing, I think you captured everything just perfectly.

So weird. I thought I already left a review, no matter!

So I though this was beyond cute :)

It's realistic in the sense that, Hey, if you're going out with someone and then *BAM* fall in love with someone else, it will always be messy. There's no way in the world that everyone won't be affected by something like that (providing their conscience is still intact)

But sometimes you can't choose who you fall in like/love with it. From many-a-movie it seems with fall for the ones we really shouldn't. Ahh, the forbidden fruit ;)

x reeka

i prefer Mac but i still felt bad 4 Davey! i likedf it! well done- mission completed!
charlotte

Yup, there's definitely a healthy amount of angst and sexual tension in here. It's really good, especially the mixed feelings and the messiness of the whole situation.

your story is absolutely perfect. I love everything about it!

yeah great story! I love the mixed feelings

I read this story so long ago and didn't notice you wrote it until now, I adore it.

This was such a good one-shot...well-written and an incredible take on a (kind of) hackneyed concept. It was so crazy...because I was disgusted with Evie for doing what she did to the brothers and I don't know, before I just always thought that a person must not ever betray the person he loves. Like, if my best friend liked the same guy I was absolutely in love with, then I would never go after him. That was my philosophy, back in the days when I was naive and life was still black and white. But, in the past few years, I've really started to question that mentality because what if you reallyy, reallyy love the person? Like how Evie loved Mac? I don't think I've reached a decision when it comes to that yet, but I really liked how this story kind of dealt with that. Like I was pretty disgusted with Evie, but at least she made a decision in the end right? And can a person really love two people at the same time?? That point Evie makes about how a heart isn't like an e-mail inbox was pretty interesting. Maybe there are just different types of love a person can have for different people? Haha, I don't know...Okay, I'm done rambling. :D Anyway, if you hadn't realized it already, I really enjoyed this.

This was a pretty darn good oneshot!!
haha oh wow...
yeah...
it was amazing, to say the least.
:D

"It had been a sweltering hot day."
Oh gosh, my English teachers always encouraged me to describe the weather as "sweltering hot", haha...

I love reading about Evie's thoughts, and she seems to be full of fears and doubts. I guess that maybe Davey has cheated on her before... :)

Hello!

I just wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed this story - it's probably my favorite one-shot I've ever read on FP. I love your other stories too, but I hope you keep doing shorter pieces like this. The character development you manage to fit into the word count is pretty amazing.

julia1984

This was a great one-shot. I loved the characters and all the angst. The whole choosing between two brothers thing always draws me in but this was much better written than most. Good job!