Reviews for Our Hate Is All We Have

Reviews For: Our Hate Is All We Have

Kaiyako Kagami 2008-02-26 ch 1,	Hey! This is a really good story you have going here, I really like it so far! Your style of writing is very descriptive; and I can almost see the characters doing what they are. Elizabeth sounds interesting to read about and I look forward to seeing more of what she does with that attitude. The only real thing I can point out for correction is that you seem to have spaces between the first quotation mark and the first word. Ex: “ Show me no mercy,” her voice sounded larger than she felt and that pleased her,“ For I shall show you none and surely none will be given you on the day of your own judgment.” But I think that there was the only place that I saw that. I like how you put some particular words in italics to make them stick out. It really works. Once again, good job; and all the best with your future chapters. Kaiyako K.
Tay 2008-02-26 ch 1,	Wow; another great story. I am intrigued. Please update soon.
Will Seaver 2008-02-25 ch 1,	I really liked the fight you've played out here. It really broke down what was probably fifteen seconds of action and really brought me into the experience. I'm eager to read the rest and learn how it all happened.
dragonflydreamer 2008-02-25 ch 1,	Amazing! I loved it! You described the action so perfectly and fluidly that sometimes I was just reading the owrds, but other times I was seeing the whole thing play out in my mind. I don't know if you've ever seen Brother Bear, but it was like that scene where Koda was explaining the attack and Kinai (sp?) was having the flashbacks. Yeah, wierd little analogy there... This was an amazing way to start a story. Like another reviewer said, it really captivates the reader, not only in the prologue itself, but for the resst of the story, too. I particularly liked how Elizabeth became sort of deteched from her body and the pain as she was dying. No major grammatical/spelling errors and deffinately no errors in content! Can't wait for the first chapter!
Fading Illusion 2008-02-24 ch 1,	It's pretty good. Just remember that when a person speaks, it should be a new line, unless the previous sentence pertains to him/her. Take this part for example: Slowly, pain stitching through her entire right side, she stood and prepared herself. He cocked his head to the side, expression unreadable, as he watched. “Remember,” her voice was already weaker, “No mercy, Monster.” It should be: Slowly, pain stitching through her entire right side, she stood and prepared herself. He cocked his head to the side, expression unreadable, as he watched. "Remember," her voice was already weaker, "No mercy, Monster." It's nice, so keep up the good work.
Guacamole 2008-02-23 ch 1,	wow this is very exciting! like it already so please update soon!
She Writes Murder 2008-02-21 ch 1,	Wow. I was hooked by the time I finished reading the first paragraph. I actually had to tell myself to slow down because everything had become a blur from speed-reading - it was only then that I could take it all in and fully appreciate the story. This is finely detailed, and I love how you described the swords. It's good that you acknowledge the difference of weapons, they tell a lot about who wields them. I hope you continue on with this story, I want to find out more!

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