Reviews for A Student of Natural Philosophie

Reviews For: A Student of Natural Philosophie

LeenaElle 2008-01-30 ch 1,	abuseThis is a very different approach, quite unique to everything else I've read on fiction press. I kind of like it, and at the same time, am not really sure what to make of it...interesting, very interesting...totally meant as a compliment, it's nice to see people moving away from the same old!
R. M. Kent 2008-01-24 ch 3,	abuseI loved the format - its great having something to read quickly and simply, without having to think about it too much. I hope that doesn't sound bad, its not meant to be. I really enjoyed them.
Vixen of Vienna 2008-01-23 ch 3,	abuseOh, um, that was short, but it is a sketch after all. Ha-ha. You spelled Tobias' name wrong one time in the narration. It is toward the end. Really? Is Cambridge like that? I am applying to Cambridge, Cambridge, MA that is. (yeah, bad joke) Hm, may I make a suggestion? You may wish to avoid modifying dialogue. You have "said formally." Not necessary. Find some other way of saying it, or consider this is the Regency after all and that such a setting would be formal--done deal. No adverbs needed. P.S. I am going to indulge in shameless self-promotion, but here me out. If you are still looking for works to add to your C2, then you may find a certain historical vignette written as a dialogue between a soldier and an Austrian girl entitled The Lady and the Hussar by moi appealing. The aftermath of Austerlitz is the backdrop, so you know you have Napoleon somewhere in there. Please give it a read and let me know your verdict. Thanks and ciao.
Anusari Vairanon 2008-01-10 ch 1,	abuseNow I will admit Im a bit confused about whats really going on in this pieces, but I love how these little segments are like snapshots. Its a quick glimpse (not sure if I spelled that right) into the characters life, then your out again and somewhere else, its confusing, but also highly intriguing. I like it. And I have to say I liked the line "Paul played love to her through the flute." Probably the best... I love how 'played love' sounds almost like 'made love' providing the same image of great emotional and passionate intensity, minus the physical contact, which in my opinion shows an even greater connection. Very nicely done (I'm not sure if it was intentional or what, but either way, very nice). Anu V.
Vixen of Vienna 2007-12-17 ch 2,	abuseAh, the sketchy vignette, very difficult to write. Hats off to you. I like them. They get to the point without being direct, like there is a subtlety about them. Oh, love the last line from the first chapter--"playing love ... on the flute" Sexy yet classy as someone already mentioned. You may, and this is just a suggestion, wish to read Bohemians of the Latin Quarter by Henri Murger, not that you need help in what you are doing, but it may be of interest to you. I know I am more plot driven than character driven, but that is a personal style thing for everyone. Nice work. It is a fairly difficult medium, and you are sculpting this individual's persona well. I hope more is revealed soon. And thanks for reading my story and adding it to your c2. It is very flattering. Ciao.
multiples of six 2007-12-14 ch 2,	abuseInteresting sketches! I like how the personalities come through even though there isn't too much plot. Nicely done =)
Madison L 2007-12-13 ch 1,	abuseThese were very nice and light to read. I now feel the need to write some vignettes of my own. And of course, if you were to create a C2 for Regency fiction, I would be flattered if you included my story in it. Thank you! I loved the last line of this collection, probably because I'm a complete sop, and "played love to her through the flute" is both sexy and pristine. Very nice.
Torngari 2007-12-12 ch 1,	abuseI haven't really read anything based off sketches before so I wasn't quite sure what to expect. I skimmed the structure before reading it just out of curiosity, and was pleasantly surprised by how everything fit together. The element added by the music seemed perfect. It helps to give direction and a whole new dictionary of vocab that you utilize well. Will definitely keep up with it ;)
Honey Nut Loop and m-j 2007-12-11 ch 1,	abuseI can imagine these scenes interwoven into a singular greater story. You write well. You use interesting verbs, such as your use . I think there is at least one sentece that could be tightened. For example, if you will permit me: 'Tobias watched enviously as the melody danced down Kit's fingers and out through the keys.' Your last line is glorious. I adore it. Have you ever read Coram Boy by Jamilia Gavin. From reading your pieace i think you would lik eit.
Thomicas 2007-12-11 ch 1,	abuseI really like the way you give us readers an impression of Tobias' personality and way of being, by using very few words and no "direct" descriptions. Already at this point I can see this develop into something really interesting. Hope I'll be reading more of your works soon! ~Thomas
Mumbo.Jumbo.Strawberry 2007-12-10 ch 1,	abuseHi! I decide to drop a review for your story, since you so kindly did it for mine. This is really interesting, little scenes of a person...Who knows what it might unfold? You can keep with these vague (Sp? I'm a terrible speller...) scenes, and in the end, there could be this complex character developed. So much possibilities can happen. I personally love this, it gives off this mysterious quality to the main character. Even though these are mere sketches, I feel like it's uncovering something, and to add it along. Pretty cool. Keep up the good work!

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